I’m the kind of rper whose starters usually are longer than one page. I just love adding details, and I think they are important because they make the writing more interesting and fluid. It’s all about the witty bits of a sentence, you know? And while some of my partners love me for writing a lot, there are some that just can’t keep up. So they’ll always say things like “oh, yeah, I love this plot you thought of, we can totes do it, but please don’t write too much lol”
Hence the muffled sobbing. I can’t not write too much. I’m so sorry, I’m a bad friend and I will flood you with letters!
Submitted by theripperofnyc
This is directed more toward paragraph posters and purple prosers in general than the OP:
Yes. Yes you can. That goes double for Tumblr/forum posting, which allows editing time that live rp doesn’t. All you have to do is go back through your post and take all that shit out.
If it’s not directly related to the immediate scene, take that shit out. If it’s an inner thought or observation your partner can’t respond to, take that shit out. (If it’s a an emotion-laden memory, throw into the fucking sun.) If you describe your character’s appearance in any way, and it isn’t vital for the plot at hand, take that shit out. If you spend more than a sentence on a single action, take the extra shit out. Any time you tell instead of show, take that shit out.
I get the appeal of florid detail, I do, but this ain’t 1890. Good writing is concise; it’s evocative without being cumbersome. Make the effort to leave those details to the reader’s imagination. Not only will your friend appreciate it, you’ll be a better writer.
"Show, not tell" is one of the most important rules of writing.
It’s even more important in live RP, like within MMOs, where the RP is dependent on the presence of the people involved. Don’t make somebody wait fifteen minutes for you to slam out ten paragraphs that basically amount to your character taking a seat on a bench and opening a book. Try to keep it brief:
"[Character] delicately seats herself on the bench, straightens her skirt, and removes a well-loved tome from the velvety satchel at her side once she’s settled. She opens it to one of several marked pages, and after a moment’s passage her frustrated muttering is audible over the din of the square as she furiously flips between marks. ‘I know it’s here somewhere,’ she hisses."
It doesn’t require a description of the character’s prim, proper, and feminine outward attitude— that can be inferred by her mannerisms. It doesn’t require an internal monologue talking about how she can’t find what she’s looking for or even what it is that she’s seeking— it can be inferred by the fact that she’s angrily flipping between pages that she badly wants to find it. It doesn’t require a description of her love for study, reading, or whatever the book’s subject matter may be— it can be inferred by the fact that she’s clearly been through this book and references it frequently, and also the passion with which she uses it.
It also leaves plenty open. What is she looking for? It’s a hook to approach, something for another character to ask. The less said, the more is left open to your partner. Give people something to work with. Paragraph RP can get very one-sided because there may be something someone can respond to, but then you’ve gone ahead and narrated past it and it becomes awkward to address.
In forum or journal situations it becomes a little more tolerable because there’s ample time and space to fill, but in live RP the shorter the sweeter.
sry we don’t play that way, we play in the style of “advance the plot ASAP and if there’s porn then double points”